Friday, February 24, 2012

Island...

Ahh! I screeched as I awoke from the same nightmare that had been haunting me for over a year now, with the dampness of a fearful sweat. My mind will not stop replaying the events that had occurred that past year. It was a sunny wednesday summer evening, everything was just about perfect, the breeze and smell of the salty ocean drifted through the air until I found myself gasping and searching for the little air that I could find. My heart was beating as fast as the thoughts running through my mind. Will I make it out? Will he kill me?. . .


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4 comments:

  1. MeganFebruary 27, 2012 at 10:21 AM

    This would be a really good start to something more, definitely a cliff hanger! (:

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  2. TiannaEatsworldFebruary 27, 2012 at 10:23 AM

    I can't read it, but when you read it to me it was fantastic :)

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  3. TrentFebruary 27, 2012 at 10:24 AM

    It's a great opening to a potentially longer story. It's a fantastic cliff-hanger and you use great imagery. I like the part, "with the dampness of a fearful sweat".

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  4. RissaFebruary 27, 2012 at 10:25 AM

    This would make a good story (: You could add a bit more detail, just little things, to keep the "edge-of-my-seat" status, but I really do enjoy where this story could be headed (:

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